pwcorgigirl (
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2010-09-05 09:58 pm (UTC)
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I love the quiet strength you bring to writing Blythe. &hearts
There are a few very tiny things I saw:
Missing a word here:
But all it took was one phone with James ...
Cuddy's eyes are light blue:
Dark hair, dark eyes and a quick wit...
Needs a "too" instead of "to":
Blythe had been to worried about Greg at the time ...
You have "made" back-to-back in two sentences.
Arrangements were made. Lists were made ...
Maybe "Lists were compiled and double-checked ...
"Then then would have called." Should be "they".
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There are a few very tiny things I saw:
Missing a word here: But all it took was one phone with James ...
Cuddy's eyes are light blue: Dark hair, dark eyes and a quick wit...
Needs a "too" instead of "to": Blythe had been to worried about Greg at the time ...
You have "made" back-to-back in two sentences. Arrangements were made. Lists were made ... Maybe "Lists were compiled and double-checked ...
"Then then would have called." Should be "they".